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:中考英語寫作精彩點評與修改

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中考英語複習:中考英語寫作精彩點評與修改

中考英語作文題三:

有些人認為中學生看電視是在浪費時間,另一些人則認為看電視對中學生是有益的。請你以Is Watching TV a Waste of Time為題寫一篇作文。要點如下:

1.一些人認為看電視有益,一些人則不這麼認為。

2.你的看法和理由

學生習作及修改:

Is Watching TV a Waste of Time

Some people think watching TV is good for children, but others think watching TV is a waste of time.

From my point of view, television is playing a very important role in our life, so I don’t think watching TV is a waste of time. It can also learn much from it. (We can learn much from it.) Every evening, my grandfather get international news on TV, he wants to know the newest massages of world. (兩個句子不能用逗號,連線,可以合併: Every evening my grandfather watches international news on TV, who wants to know what is happening around the world.)My mother loves animals, she usually watches Animal World. It’s too interesting. (句子合併:My mother loves animals, who usually watches Animal World. It’s very interesting.) I also can learn English or other languages from some programs.

Watching TV, I think it is good for us. (I think 作為插入語放在句子的主謂之間。Watching TV, I think, is good to us.) It can help us learn more and more knowledges we never know. (增加知識表達成:enrich one’s knowledge (不可數名詞), 可以改成:It can help us enrich our knowledge we have never learned.)

點評:

寫的比第一篇好,開頭和結尾經過上課的指導都已經寫到位了。問題主要出在第二段,在內容的.表達上還有待提高。急需改進的還是句子的問題:簡單句合併成狀語從句或定語從句的問題。